CCDN 231- Reviews after my draft 500 words

Reviews after my draft 500 words- I have had my 231 draft marked by some of the students in my class and the feedback was prety good. THe evidence managed to back up my experiment and am now looking at redoing bits of the structure for my essay/500 words. What I was told was needed is too clearly state what "Comfort" is, define my experimentation more and potentially talk a little more on shoes in general.

Below are my sheets from class and the draft essay.